Warrant Officer Flight Packet: Feedback on resume summary

I am currently putting together my packet. I keep hearing and reading that the resume summary should be two paragraphs and really needs to be your reason to what makes you a good choice for being selected. I have been working on mine for a bit and would like some feedback. This is just the rough draft.

There isn’t anything else in this world I’d rather be than a Rotary wing aviator. My passion to fly and gain knowledge on high performance aircraft is immense. My extremely valuable work ethic and devotion to help others is why I know that I am a prime choice for a Rotary wing aviator.
There are many potential candidates that apply for Army aviator, but few have what it really takes. I have what it takes. I bring to the table my bag of skills that most people don’t have. I am able to work in a team environment using my intelligent people skills and I have the mental capacity to stay patient during stressful times to work to a solution. I carry a calm and collective approach to situations gathering the facts before acting upon them. As I was a husky operator the ability to have monumental attention to detail was natural to me. Since numerous lives rested in my hands I had to be quick in my decisions and speculations to spot the slightest differences in the world in front of my vehicle. I had to perform many things simultaneously in very little time. I had to read computers, control the performance of my vehicle, scan the route ahead for discrepancies or threats, watch my rake behind me for any threats I may have uncovered or dug up, report to my platoon sergeant via radio, and assess potential hazards for the following convoy. With these qualities that I possess I know I can bring them to the warrant officer aviation field to greatly benefit the community of aviators.

I am also hoping to submit my packet by the deadline of 13 March for the May board. I take my AFCT on the 26th of FEB to raise my GT. I also take the SIFT on the 5th. I am worried that should I succeed in achieving passing scores on both tests that if I submit my packet at the last second would it benefit me more to wait until the 15 May deadline for the July board or try to get it in asap?