Does anyone have good resume bullet points for military service?

I copied/pasted a lot of my OER into my CV. Example:


RESEARCH MANAGEMENT

(2012-present)
Military Director, Combat Casualty Care Research Program (CCCRP), USAMRMC

• Plan, Program, and Budget approximately $50M/year in Research, Development, and Training & Education core funding.

• Integrated Product Team (IPT) Co-chair for the Portable Neurostimulation (PoNS) device.

• Responsible for coordinating a $15M, multi-site clinical trial to support FDA approval of the PoNS neuromodulation device for treating balance/gait disorders associated with TBI, Parkinson’s, and MS.

• Develop regulatory strategies to guide/inform future research objectives to meet FDA requirements for safety and efficacy.

• Project Coordinator/Contracting Officer Representative (COR): Reducing symptoms of vestibular, cognitive, or emotional dysfunction in soldiers with post-concussive and post-traumatic stress using cranial nerve noninvasive modulation

• Responsible for coordinating all aspects of funding, IRB approval, hiring of personnel, and purchasing of equipment for the execution of a $680,000 traumatic brain injury study being conducted collaboratively at USAMRMC, UW Madison, and Blanchfield Army Community Hospital.

• Assists in authorship, editing, and subsequent IRB approval of the research protocol.

• Prepared an informational briefing for MG Patricia Horoho (Surgeon General of the Army) and talk show personality Montel Williams, outlining the current status of neuromodulation research and goals of this project

http://www.onetonline.org/crosswalk/MOC/

This link allows you to punch in your MOS, and it will list a civilian equivalent, if there is one, some list 12 or more. Try it!

Here are two real examples – one Army Infantry, one Marine – from recent military resumes I have seen. First is the excerpt from the resume and following it is a better way to express the work so that a hiring manager will be interested. These should give you some ideas on how to effectively create your own achievements.
Example:
“Worked as Infantry Mortar 11C as a team and individual to provide security and stability to the local populous while deployed, trained for missions and operations, and kept inventory of weaponry and supplies. Managed lower rank mortar men by counseling, training, and deployment preparation.”
From this portion of a paragraph, here are some useful resume bullets:
* While serving in a combat zone, trained and led 10 person mortar team to successfully protect and defend villagers.
* Tracked and managed inventory of weapons and supplies on a daily basis to eliminate shortages and ensure adequate resources were always available.
* Selected to train, develop, counsel, and ensure all team members were ready for deployment. Results included very low injury rate and successful deployment and return.

These bullet points more clearly demonstrate someone who has been successfully leading others, creating teamwork, has been recognized for his abilities, and has managed some logistics.