Posted on Jul 27, 2021
Can someone please give a review on my WOFT application Resume Summary?
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My passion to become a soldier in the U.S. Army started at a young age. My Father answered the call of duty in 2002 when I was just five years old. Growing up on military bases made me appreciate those who chose to serve our country. I looked up to the men and women walking around in uniform. I teared up watching white buses full of service members return home from combat being escorted by motorcades ensuring no red lights delayed the reuniting of a family. I looked up to my Father for all the sacrifices he made. I realized when I was young this job was not for everyone, and I thought to myself if not me, then who? I wanted to be a soldier.
I believe that I am a great soldier. I push myself physically and mentally to be better than I was the day before. I make a point to shoot expert on the weapons range. I make sure to outperform my peers when it comes to PT. I listen to my superiors, and do much more than what is expected of me. My military career may not be long, but I believe I have a performance record to show I am capable of much more. I was chosen as the Soldier of the Cycle at basic training. I won a brigade board and the Iron Soldier Award at AIT. I was recognized as a great leader and hard worker on the COVID response team with an Army Achievement Medal. I am ready and qualified to take the next step in my military career, becoming a Warrant Officer.
I will make a great Warrant Officer Aviator. My job experience comes from heavy equipment operation. I know operating heavy equipment comes nowhere close to flying a helicopter in a combat zone, but I have expertise with the fundamentals of flying my competition do not have. I have not had the opportunity to control a helicopter, but I do have the experience and natural ability to operate a machine or vehicle with surgeon like precision while constantly assessing my work area for potential hazards. When a tough task is at hand I am the guy they call on. I am the best at what I do, and I want to bring my skills and qualifications to the test by becoming a Warrant Officer Aviator.
I believe that I am a great soldier. I push myself physically and mentally to be better than I was the day before. I make a point to shoot expert on the weapons range. I make sure to outperform my peers when it comes to PT. I listen to my superiors, and do much more than what is expected of me. My military career may not be long, but I believe I have a performance record to show I am capable of much more. I was chosen as the Soldier of the Cycle at basic training. I won a brigade board and the Iron Soldier Award at AIT. I was recognized as a great leader and hard worker on the COVID response team with an Army Achievement Medal. I am ready and qualified to take the next step in my military career, becoming a Warrant Officer.
I will make a great Warrant Officer Aviator. My job experience comes from heavy equipment operation. I know operating heavy equipment comes nowhere close to flying a helicopter in a combat zone, but I have expertise with the fundamentals of flying my competition do not have. I have not had the opportunity to control a helicopter, but I do have the experience and natural ability to operate a machine or vehicle with surgeon like precision while constantly assessing my work area for potential hazards. When a tough task is at hand I am the guy they call on. I am the best at what I do, and I want to bring my skills and qualifications to the test by becoming a Warrant Officer Aviator.
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Responses: 2
Your resume leaves a lot to be desired. There's nothing wrong with the first paragraph, but the second and third have a lot of filler and wordiness that could be done away with. The resume is important, but so is the rest of USAREC 3.2. I'd be happy to take a look at it if you're interested in my critique. Send me a DM.
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There is no right answer to the summary. It’s your personal summary of who you are and what you bring to the table, and that’s what you wrote. Only comment I have is always capitalize Soldier, best of luck on your submission.
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