I am trying to apply for 153A and am currently working on the resume. Will someone please critique what I have?

To the U.S. Army Warrant Officer Candidate School Selection Board,

I am requesting consideration into the United States Army as a Warrant Officer specializing in rotary-wing training. I have served in the Army for nine years. One year with 2nd Infantry Division in Korea, five years supporting 1st Special Forces Group (Airborne) in Washington, and three years as a Drill Sergeant in South Carolina. With the high optempo of both Special Forces and being a Drill Sergeant, I still had the opportunity to attend college, SERE (C), Master Combatives, ESB, and more. It has been a great opportunity to not only work on myself as a leader, mentor, and person, but also increase the lethality of the force by providing my soldiers and trainees with the information I obtained from the challenging schools I have attended.
Being in the military gives me purpose, being a pilot would give me freedom. I love waking up and putting on the uniform every day. I want to continue to do so until I can no longer breathe. My interest in becoming a pilot stemmed from the "Discovery Flight" I was able to conduct. I fell in love with the atmosphere and the opportunities I can achieve outside of the Army. Being a Culinary Specialist has its perks, but doesn't have the reward, stability or purpose I am striving for; being a pilot will. As confucius said, "choose a job you love, and you won't have to work a day in your life".